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PostSubject: What do you think?   Thu Jul 07, 2011 11:59 pm

So, what do y'all think if I published my NaNoWriMo novel on FF.net? I'm a bit (okay, more than a bit, I'm VERY) nervous to put it out there, because it's the first REAL piece of writing I've ever done, and in my opinion, I don't think it's all that good. Razz It's got 'personal' characters in it, characters inspired by my friends and family. I'm not sure if I want to publish it or not. So....naturally, I thought I'd run it by my sistahs first. Wink Here's the prologue, and let me know if it's something you'd like to read more of, or would close and continue searching for other fics, or keep reading in anticipation. (and don't just say it cuz we're sisters, be serious. Wink )


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She bent over the cradle; a single tear rolling down her cheek. Gently Marlinda picked up her tiny baby girl and looked lovingly into her deep emerald eyes. The small pudgy baby cooed in her mother’s arms. Soon, there was a knock on the door. Anxious, Marlinda hurried to open it. She cracked open the door to find a tall female red-skinned alien.

Dressed in elegant robes and a tunic with a belt, the female introduced herself as Shaak Ti, Jedi Knight. Shaak Ti was a species called Togruta, from the planet Shili. Togrutans had long blue and white head tails, which resembled human hair in some respects.

As the Dantooine prairie winds battered her cloak and robes, Marlinda invited the exotic Jedi into her humble hut-like home. Squeezing her eyes shut in a fruitless effort to stop the tears flowing from them, she turned to face the Jedi Master and Marlinda spoke.

“Master Jedi, I know that my child is Force sensitive. One of your fellow Jedi Knights told me of it on a past mission here to Dantooine. I have decided to give my darling baby up to the Jedi Temple in hopes you will train her to use and understand her unique powers.” Marlinda finished, choking back a sob. After a moment, Shaak Ti spoke.

“Madame Marlinda Sunstar, the Jedi Order thanks you, and we can promise you that your child will be taken care of. We will teach her and train her as our own. That is the Jedi Way.” She smiled at Marlinda as the baby was placed in her arms. The little baby’s vibrant green eyes snapped open, and upon noticing the woman holding her was not her mother, she began to cry. Shaak Ti rocked the baby softly in her arms. Marlinda walked the Jedi and her precious baby back to the Jedi’s star-ship, where they began to say goodbye. Marlinda held her baby close one last time, and as her lips kissed the baby’s soft cheek, Marlinda whispered to her daughter.

“Goodbye my darling, I will always love you, my Marilee” and with that she carried her baby into the Jedi’s ship, placed her in the prepared cradle and walked back down the loading ramp. Standing in the doorway of her home, Marlinda watched the Jedi take off and continued to watch the ship until it blinked from the sky. Only then did she fall to the ground and weep.


So what did you think? I know it's short, but it's only the Prologue/Prelude. Razz I'm very unsure as to what to do with it. Razz I have an entire NOVEL (seriously) and I kinda like the story line, but it's very hard for me to publish it for some reason. XDD So, be hard on me, give me feedback. What do you think so far? Anyone who's interested can PM me if you desperately want more. XDD I want to know if I should or shouldn't put it on fanfic.net. Wink

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 12:57 am

It's really good so far!!!! I know you've been told this many times, but your writing is incredible! You should definitely put it on fanfiction.net

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 1:00 am

Haha! Aww thanks Satine. Smile I'm glad you liked it! Sorry it's so short. Razz Thanks for your encouragement! Smile

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 7:28 am

Girl you should not be afraid to put it on FF.net! It was awesome I really want to see what happens!! I promise you that is just great!! You have a talent for writing!!
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 9:35 am

I HAVE to find out what happens next. I love it!
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 10:04 am

Awwwww!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks girls!!!!!!! Very Happy I think I will publish it. I'll work on editing it tonight. Then I'll publish it. Wink

I'll keep y'all posted on when I put up chapters and stuff. Smile

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 11:24 am

Yay!! Im so excited to read more!!
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 12:49 pm

Cool!!!!

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 7:58 pm

That was really good! Very Happy I would love to read more! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 7:59 pm

Thank you!!!!!! Very Happy I'll edit and post some more here. XDDD

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 8:06 pm

I think you should put it on FF.net. I liked it! Smile
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 8:09 pm

Thanks SWA!!!!!!!!!! Very Happy I think I'm going to. Wink

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 10:52 pm

Alright, I posted the prologue/chapter one on FF.net. XDD
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*cringes* Read if you want! I'll update pretty regularly, however fast I can edit. XDD

Also, on another note, LOOK AT MY AWESOME BETAREADER PROFILE!!!!!!!!!! Click on my Author Name, and click where it says "Betareader Profile" and read it!!!!! LOL! I'm so psyched. XDD

Thanks y'all for the encouragement!!!!! Very Happy

Also, I credit my girls from HU who gave me the names of the clones. Especially Satine. Wink Satine gave me the name Shadow, who becomes one of the main characters. *huggles* Thanks Satine!!!!!!! Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 10:59 pm

OH I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!! You should never be cautious about posting your writing on there Jedi~Chick!!! You have a major talent for writing!! If I could write like that I would be so happy!! I cant wait for more!!
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 11:02 pm

*sniffles* Awww!!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you so much!!!!!!!!!! Very Happy Rex'sgirl you just made my day. Wink I was feeling very self-conscious of my writing today, and I'm so glad you like it so much!!!!!! You made me feel so special!!!!!!!! Very Happy I love you girl! Smile *hugs*

Also, feel free to review on FF.net. Wink I allow anonymous reviewers. xD (i'll do anything for reviews...they're like comments on my blog.) xDDD

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 11:04 pm

Your welcome!! And I promise with my whole heart Im not just saying all that stuff! I truly mean it!!! Ok Im totally going to review it!!! *hugs back* Love you to girl!!
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 11:07 pm

AWW!!!!!! Thank you!!!!!!!!! Very Happy Awesome!!! *hugs again* Thank you a billion times Rex'sgirl!!!! And, I think your writing is FANTASTIC!!!!!!! Don't sell your self short! Wink

And your review nearly made me cry.
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 11:09 pm

No problem!! I just give credit where its due! Wink I know Im just the kind of person who goes hard on myself! AAAAWWWWW!!!! *gives you a breathe taker hug*
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 11:10 pm

LOL, I'll do anything for reviews as well. Ask questions at the end of a chapter. They're a great way to get people to reveiw. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Fri Jul 08, 2011 11:10 pm

Ps I reviewed your story Jedi~Chick!
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Sat Jul 09, 2011 9:38 am

Aww, I love it! This is a great story! I'm looking forward to reading more!

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Sat Jul 09, 2011 10:02 am

Thanks so much Rachel!!!!!!!! *hugs*

And thanks SWA and Rex'sgirl too!!!!!!!! Very Happy Thanks for your reviews!!!!! Very Happy *hugs tight* Also, SWA that's a GREAT idea!!!!! I'll try that. xDD

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Sat Jul 09, 2011 1:32 pm

That was AMAZING! Great job. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Sat Jul 09, 2011 2:41 pm

Thank you so much!!!!!!! Very Happy I think I'll edit and post chapter 2 today! Very soon in fact. Wink

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PostSubject: Re: What do you think?   Sat Jul 09, 2011 2:42 pm

Yay!! Im totally going to be on the lookout for it!!
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